Undercover

 I love reading it’s my passion besides art. 

The only down side of being a devout reader is trying to find a story that doesn’t repeat a plot with another one. That’s why I read fanfictions when not reading a book.

I like the element of adding an original character to the plot and maybe that character will be the love interest of one of the main characters. Take for example Tim McGee from Ncis he didn’t meet Delilah until sometime before season 10 of the series and it wasn’t until season 14 he asked her to marry him. 

So that gives the potential writer 9 seasons to give Tim a love interest and then the writer could carry on through the series with that OC being with him. Or you could have him meet the oc instead of Delilah. Both are good. 

But my main concern is a professional writer or even one who wants to be a true professional  (all fanfics writers want to be but a lot fall flat)  do there homework for the characters and even for the plot. You just don’t write what you think should be written and hope for the best.

A good example is this, I came across a story that the FBI loaned an agent to the NCIS to help them track down a guy who sales organs on the black market they find out who it is and have the FBI agent go undercover . Good theme so far but as soon as they find out who the guy was they had the Agent go under cover despite her telling everyone she’s never been undercover and doesn’t know what to do.

That right there is a flat out lie on so many levels. All Agents have been trained to go under cover it’s only those who actually show the potential to do it with out braking character are kept on those types of assignments and if they don’t have someone that will miss them in some rare cases a married fbi will be given that assignment but it’s usually no where near the places some one they know would see them. 

The undercover cases could take any where from a few weeks to a few years not a couple of hours for the agents to actually become there character. They also wouldn’t be themselves and actually walk up to the bad guy right off the bat and ask for the product or person etc because there mark is already on the look out for trouble.

Any good agent would actually work there way up to meeting there mark through who they know to get the product or what ever they are trying to get to. Then they establish a type of friendship or work relationship with there target so they could have enough evidence to put the bad guy away for good. They also would need a good back ground to protect them and there family because  from then on they have a target on there back.

This writer had a good idea for there story but she didn’t do any type of homework for not only the show but the jobs that the characters on the show had. She rushed the undercover operation and many other parts of the story so much that the oc doesn’t feel like she belongs with the story at all.

Review on Reverence a Spock/oc fanfic

 Don't mind stories that add an extra element to it. This story was based on the remake of the Star Trek movie. The additional character is supposed to be the love interest of Spock, which you don't get to see for quite a long time. I guess the author was to a slow burn type of romance for the story, which I don't mind at all. 

But what kills the story is that the lead female is furious at star fleet and her father, who abandoned her and her mother when the girl was right. She finds that her father survives the destruction of Vulcan along with her young half-brother. He tries to talk to her and acts like it is no big deal which in Vera’s mind is which, in my opinion, I can’t blame her for being angry. She goes seventeen chapters on being mad at just life in general (which has been pretty shitty to her), and when she finds out that the only man she’s ever thought of as a father figure has overlooked her puts someone else as the new captain of the ship it finally breaks her.

Now Spock has never, in the length of the seventh chapters, treated her like he sees her as anything but more than someone to get in his way. Heck, she asks him why he pushes her out the way every time she’s speaking, and he tells her, and this is me quoting him, “you were in my way.”

By the time I got to the bottom of chapter seventeen I was very disappointed. Kirk knowing she was upset and at this point didn’t like him and really didn’t like Spock tells he that he wouldn’t stop her from leaving but he wants her to talk to Spock before she does to check in on him. (Which she does because let’s face it she was pushed into it not only by Kirk but some how by Spock prime who we all know was the mystery person on the ice planet.) 

She does and with one tiny sentence she’s all okay I’ll stay. It’s not oh I’ve liked you all this time or a sentence saying be better then what everyone thinks of you. Nope It’s “actually, I want you to stay.” He doesn’t give her anything to gone on with why he wants her to stay and she’s like I your not lying on which he replied Vulcan’s can’t lie.

That alone ruins the story for me. I mean if I spent that last so many years hating how I was being treated by not only family (her dad not her mother) but a place that wants to lock me up because I didn’t want to stay (which the story is also vague on..and yes I know it talks about how she stole a ship and a few other reasons but the story really doesn’t go into a good detail of why she’s like that) I wouldn’t just accept a few words to keep me from leaving I would want something concrete that’s why I couldn’t finish the story

Family drama 7/10

Tragic background 4/10

Love interest 2/10

Story plot 2/10

Over all this story needs an extreme make over because if this is meant to be a romance story then I’m a monkeys uncle. Because what I’ve read so fare lacks any potential To be a good romance story. And those who can’t see the problems with it need to rethink there views of romance because this story is for the lack of better terms sucks on a lot of  levels